Like poetry? I just wrote this tonight and wanted some reviews and opinions/critical advice!?

if you dont like poetry/ dont want to be respectful about it, etc, just dont bother answering =)


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It feels like ecstacy


it's been so long


since I've just sat and smiled


content in the moment





;Soulfly


it can be spun around on a finger, like the ring he gave me


its the best thing you cant let go of


its where Im at right now





Dancing in lullabies


Doubts dont matter; aren't changing a thing anymore


it feels so good


It wont stop





I don't remember feeling like this


knowing I dont have to worry


a whole weight lifted off my shoulders


like it all just faded awayLike poetry? I just wrote this tonight and wanted some reviews and opinions/critical advice!?
this poem sound beautiful. i liked it so much, i sent the link to a close friend.


have you thought about adding a beat, and considering as a song?Like poetry? I just wrote this tonight and wanted some reviews and opinions/critical advice!?
sharing what you are feeling can be a difficult task. You have done just that. I see you sitting with a far away smile on your face.





You have talent. Keep sharing.
Your poem reminds me of when I drift into a dream. In my dream state, perhaps even the moment of drifting off and coming back from a dream. I sense the feeling of magic...of freedom. Good job!
Sound interesting. Something serene about it. There's something else going on here it seems. You've captured fleeting happiness.
I like it. It feels like something anyone can relate back to.
It sounds like pure freedom to me. I think it is a moment to be cherished and very well written.
nicely done, very enjoyable read.